[spoiler=Brawl characters introduced so far: IOOA]Peach
Zelda
Bowser
Mario
Luigi
Samus/Zero Suit Samus
Snake
Captain Falcon[/spoiler]


Introduction
It was a dark, stormy night in the Brawl world. In the castle of Princess Peach, she was having a practice fight with Zelda. Then Toad came in.
"Princess!! Researches have found that a new enemy has appeared!!"
"What is his name?" Peach asked, putting her golf club on the ground.
"We have no idea. All we know is he is trying to clone everybody, or turn one against another." Toad said, pointing outside. Through the storming clouds they saw a shining yellow figure. He emitted a bright yellow flash, which caused everyone to cover their eyes. When they looked again, Toad was gone.
"Aw man!! I just lost my B spam!" Peach said, throwing her arms in the air."
"Peach! We must find everyone that helped defeat Tabuu! Including Bowser, Wario, and Ganondork. I mean dorf." Zelda said, covering her mouth.
"Yea, we must, for the sake of the Brawl world. Or it will be destroyed, and we will be outta business!!" Peach said, gasping with dramatic music.

Make it longer and it'll be good.I have a few ideas for a villain and minions.

Dark Mario: Dark Star with the DNA of Mario and the power of the Shadow Queen.

Shadow Lucario: A dark version of Lucario sent from Dark Mario to hunt down the brawl characters.

Dark Meta Knight: After being freed from the Mirror World,he assists the main villain in his/her plot.

It's good, but I don't like the idea of the brawl characcters talking... Oh well, your story.

it was the introduction lol. they r not supposed to be long. XD

You really need to proofread your shit before you post it here. ._.

I don't.

No one expects you to

Unless you want your story to be looking like shit, you really should. .______.

Hardly time for opinions, the story's barely started. These things usually get better as they go along.

There are too many grammatical errors. Do you really think that that's gonna fix itself?

yesh i's liek me's grammerical erors :D Chapter 1 should be posted today.

Chapter I: Trouble in Toadville

Peach and Zelda wasted no time and didn't hesitate. They rushed down the long hall when Bowser bashed the doors in with a mighty punch. Peach and Zelda ran past him on both sides when Peach said, "Not in the mood Bowser!" Bowser just stood their, bug-eyed and jaw dropped. Arms hanging like a broken tree branch to his sides.
"B-But, I planned this attack on Peach for weeks...GRRRRROOOOAAAAHHH!" Bowser yelled. "Just great, what am I supposed to do now...I've got it!!" Bowser ran off to the dining hall and pulled up a little table and drank tea like a proper lady. He wore a sun-bonnet and one of Peach's dresses which was extremely too small for him. Peach ran back into the castle and saw him. Bowser ripped off the bonnet and the dress and held up his fists. "What are you doing here?"
"Ok, first of all, MY castle... Second of all, need your help to save the Brawl universe.... Third of all, I forgot my golf club..." Peach said, bending over to grab her club.
"Ok, I'll help...But on ONE condition."
"What is it."
"We speak of this to NO-one."
Peach snickered before finally saying "Got it." As their voices drowned out when they went down the path to Toadville, Peach asked. "Why were you drinking tea and dressed like that?"
"I-I-I was thirsty!!" Bowser said, finally coming up with a mediocre excuse.
"Riiight." Peach said sarcastically.

They came up to the hill above Toadville talking about Peach and pulling turnips out of the ground when they saw what happened. They both stood jaw-dropped at the sight. Fire was burning the village and dancing to the moonlight. The Toad's were running around and screaming. Two of them collided into each other, and the fat ones just sat there and ate.
"Oh My Gosh!" Peach exclaimed.
"What?" Bowser asked, turning to look at her.
"When did the storm stop?" she asked, now calm and looking at the sky.
"Do you NOTICE your village!!" Bowser exclaimed, arms up like he was shrugging and asking a question.
"Oh, that's nothing. You should've seen the time when-" Peach was cut off by Mario running up to her.
"It's a Princess-a Peach-a!!" Mario exclaimed with his accent saying 'uh' after every word.
"GRRRROOOOAAAHHHH!" Bowser shouted. "Where is your little butt-buddy?"
"Hey! You should-a not be-a talking like-a that!" Mario said, fist in the air.
"Watcha gonna do 'bout it?" Bowser said, getting ready to shoot fire.
"Ladies!! Enough! We have to find Mario's butt-buddy!" Peach shouted, arms spread out, seperating the two.
"His name is-a Luigi!" Mario said, bowing his head. But no one was around to hear him. Bowser and Peach were running down the hill. "Hey! Wait up-a for-a me!" Mario jumped in the air and took off to catch up.

"Ooooohhhhh..." Luigi said, being held down by a piece of wood. Zelda came across him and knelt down. "Please! a-help me!"
".....Nahhhhhh." Zelda said, getting up. She started walking away when she got hit in the butt with a green fireball. "OUCH!" she yelped. She turned around and shot out her ball of controlled magic and it hit Luigi square on and lifted the wood.
"Thanks-a Princess!" Luigi said, running off. Zelda stood there with one eye wide and the other twitching. Then she noticed Luigi come flying in the air back to her and his scream got louder. He landed with THUD! next to Zelda's feet. Mario and Peach came running up to him.
"What did we tell you about sneaking up on Bowser?" Peach asked, helping him up.
"You are-a so-a stupid!!" Mario shouted hitting him upside the head.
"No! You are!" Luigi said, throwing his arms in the air and throwing Mario on the ground and jumped on him.
"You two DO realize your village is on fire, right?" Zelda asked, looking confused. Just then Bowser came up behind Peach and lifted both Mario and Luigi by their collar. Each in one hand.
"Now LISTEN!!" Bowser yelled at both of them.
"You're-a breath stinks.." Mario said, plugging his nose.
"Shut-up!" Bowser yelled. "Now listen! We have to put the flames out before we all die in a blazing inferno!"
"What does-a inferno mean?" Luigi asked, holding his head up. Everyone except Luigi face palmed, and Mario face-palmed Bowser as well. Bowser put them down.
"Green man! Just put the flames out!" Bowser said running off. Mario used his water pump to put some out, Bowser inhaled the fire, Zelda used magic to put it out, Peach threw turnips which didn't help at all, and Luigi just sat there. Finally the flames were out and the Toad's started coming back into the village.
"Thank You!" said a purple Toad, hugging Bowser's leg.
"Get off!" Bowser started shaking his leg, but Toad wouldn't let go. Finally he plucked him off and put him on Luigi's head, who was just standing there like an idiot. Then 3 more Toad's came along and hugged Zelda, Peach, and Mario. Luigi was still standing there.
"Thanks guys!" A blue Toad said.
"You're-a welcome!" Mario said, shaking his hand.

The five started walking down a path. Luigi jumping like crazy.
"Let's-a kick some butt!" Luigi said.
"A-Luigi?" Mario said, still facing forward.
"Yes-a brother?" Luigi said, turning his head.
"Shut-up." Mario said, not turning a single part of his body.
"Ok.." Luigi said, slugging his shoulders and head down.

...

And you're proud of it?

Well THAT was anticlimantic... Lol, good chapter! :3

I wasn't planning on making the fire scene very long....Just comedy and story.

Mmkay. I'm liking it so far :P

lol not rlly but when I type my stories there is no spellcheck and im too lazy to proofread. i sometimes do, but hardly

It's not like it's out of control, you can still make out wurds. But a lot of people like to read things that have the best grammer possible.

Chapter II: The Shadows

A gunshot came across Samus' helmet and knocked her to the ground. She got back up and fired back at random, hoping to hit whatever attacked her.
"I know how to lure them out..." Samus said, imaginary lightbulb appearing above her helmet. "Final....SMASH!!!" She shot a huge laserbeam that took out a shit-load of trees, leaving a path. Her armor then fell off and there stood Zero-Suit Samus. She looked around, and sure enough, Snake walked out with his jaw-dropped and arms just hanging there. "I had a feeling it was your perverted mind, or Craptain Falcon's." ZSS said, giving her hair a flip. "Speaking of the Craptain, where is he?" ZSS asked, looking around. Then, from behind a tree, Captain Falcon walked out, same thing as Snake did. "Aw." ZSS said. "I see."
"So....Hot..." Snake mumbled.
"Very....Pretty...." Captain Falcon whispered.
"Ok. Time to pay for your little perverted minds." ZSS said, backflipping onto Captain Falcon's shoulders. She put pressure on them and forced him to hit the ground and jumped to kick Snake in the face, but he ducked. He shot out a rocket from his launcher, and ZSS did the splits to avoid it, which caused Snake to go jaw-dropped again. She shot out her twisted grabber beam and grabbed Snake. She pulled him towards her, kissed him on the cheek, then knocked his lights out. She walked over to Captain Falcon and lifted him up. He pretended to be groggy, but he lifted his head and smiled. He jumped into the air.
"Falcon....KI-!" ZSS grabbed his ankle, and reversed his attack by throwing him into a tree. He got up and used Falcon Punch, but ZSS was too smart. She jumped in the air, and kicked him in the face with both legs. Captain Falcon was out cold. She started to walk away when Mario and Luigi ran up to her and started bouncing.
"We-sa need-a your help!" Mario said, looking up at her.
"Yea!!" Luigi agreed.
"Bad guy trying to take over the world-a!" Mario exclaimed.
"Yea!!" Luigi agreed again.
"Luigi brother?" Mario said, turning to him.
"Yea??" Luigi said, looking confused.
"Shut-up." Mario said calmly, turning back to ZSS. He looked behind her, and noticed Snake and Captain Falcon knocked out. He ran over to them and used his past Dr.Mario experience to revive them back to full health.
"What happened?" Snake asked, holding his head. He turned to see Mario, and then he saw ZSS and lifted his arm to cover his face. He realized she won't hurt him, and got up. Mario ran over and did the same to Captain Falcon, who, out of reflex, Falcon Punched Mario and caused him to fly into Luigi.
"Hey! What was-a that for!" Mario yelled, rubbing his head.
"Ngh. Sorry." Captain Falcon said, walking up to them.
"Ok, we need some teams of two..." Peach said, walking up to them. "I'm thinking Mario and Luigi, duh. Captain Falcon and Snake. Zelda and I. And Bowser with ZSS."
"Why do I need to go with HIM." ZSS said, crossing her arms.
"Either him or Luigi." Peach said. ZSS looked at Luigi who was picking his nose.
"I'll stick to the over-sized turtle.." ZSS complained, almost looking sick. "Just let me get back in my armor. Final.....SMASH!!" ZSS turned back to Samus. They parted into their groups and went in search of the other characters.
"So Peach, you like Mario?" Zelda asked.
"Ew! No way! I'm into Marth." she said blushing.
"But, umm... Peach. He's gay. Plus, doesn't speak english..."
"Well who do YOU like!!" Peach yelled in anger.
"Link of course. But he doesn't know that."
"Not until we find him.." Peach said, devilish smile on her face.
"You better not!" Zelda yelled, putting Peach in a headlock.

"Hey Falcon, you like Samus?" Snake asked.
"Yea. She is really hot in her Zero-Suit. I would definately tap-" He was cut off when a black and purple replica of him appeared in front of him.
"The fu-?" Snake started to say before Captain Falcon covered his mouth. Then the replica of Snake appeared right beside the Captain Falcon replica.
"Ok. I have no idea what this is, but I'm gonna call him Shadow Falcon." Captain Falcon said facing Snake before he was Falcon Punched.
"Umm....I forfe-" Snake was hit with the rocket launcher blast and went flying onto Captain Falcon's body. Shadow Falcon and Shadow Snake ran off into the woods.

"Why won't you talk to me?" Bowser said in a 5 year old complaining voice.
"Because you're fat, you smell, and you try to hurt Peach." Samus said, walking forward.
"But that's what the Game Creators made me do!" Bowser said, running in front of Samus. Suddenly, Bowser fell to the ground and in front of Samus was Shadow Bowser. She turned around but was shot in the face by Shadow Samus' energy blast. She also went down. Shadow Bowser and Samus walked off.

Mario and Luigi were hopping on tree branches getting through the forest, when Luigi was knocked down.
"Luigi!!" Mario yelled, climbing down. He turned around and saw Shadow Mario and Luigi standing there staring him down. Mario stared at them too when he finally blinked. "Aw crap I-a lost!"
"Ooohhh." Luigi sat up but was knocked back down with a black and purple fireball. Mario looked back at them and was knocked out too.

"You take that back!" Zelda said, slapping Peach across the face.
"Never!" Peach said, kicking Zelda in the shin. "Rip-off artist!!"
"I didn't rip you off!" Zelda said, hopping up and down holding her leg.
"Oh....Sorry." Peach turned her head to the side and was put down by Shadow Zelda's magic bomb. Zelda looked to her side and got knocked out by Shadow Peach as they looked over her fading out face.

Don't use censors. They're unnecessary and stupid. Also, why don't you just use fucking Word?

There! fixed! Jesus fucking Christ....All you do to me is complain on grammer and censors. Don't even say how the chapter was... God all I ask of you is a little sympathy. I'm getting better at stories...

Grammar. I'm a grammar nazi, little boy. I don't like reading fics like this, therefore I'm not going to read it. I may skim, but I won't read it. I tried, but there are way too many mistakes for this to actually be a decent story. If you ever do decide to be a writer, and your book actually makes it to the publishing company, I'd admire the editor who even takes the time to go through this shit.

then fuck you. if u think my stories are shit, and all u want to do is hound me bout grammar then you might as well not even 'skim' through my stories cuz i made it for it to be READ not complained about.

Wow, that was fast. I'm not 'hounding' you on grammar, and in case you haven't noticed yet I am Arkeis's Grammar Nazi. Yes, I correct people's grammar. If 'hounding,' by your definition means 'being an asshole and giving you the bitter truth' then sure, I'm 'hounding' you on your grammar. I already know that I'm not going to even bother with your stories anymore, I now know that they're shit. I'm not complaining about grammar, I am being my usual critiquing self. I'm not a very nice when it comes to critiquing writing and artwork, if you haven't noticed already. If you want the sugar-coated shit then you have joined the wrong forum.

In other news, my back still hurts. How's everyone's day?

Yea, I noticed you were the fucking Nazi of grammar. My stories aren't shit, they're just not your thing. And if you want to put all this behind us, press 5.